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Tsuchigumo- Never Satisfied
Once upon a time there was a story that walked like a man, talked like a man and acted like a total bastard. This story walked the world, strutting like a mighty bull unafraid of all challengers and he changed the world to make it how he wanted.
His life was no longer a genre it was real. His life was a horrifying, romantic, tragic, comical, science-fiction cowboy detective novel, with just a splash or pornography. He was everything a story ought to be.
The problem with a successful story though. There will always be imitators.
Hyper Reality Presents
A T.H.E.M. Acknowledged event
Louis Niccals stars in;
Tsuchigumo
You’re like me. I’m never satisfied. -Alexander Hamilton
--- Sophie Thomson
You never forget what getting shot in the arm feels like, honestly, you just plain don’t. It’s a sharp sudden intensity followed by a sensation not unlike a bee sting. Something strange and hot and wrong stuck betwe
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Literature
Tsuchigumo-The Hunter in Repose
Once upon a time there was a story that walked like a man, talked like a man and acted like a total bastard. This story walked the world, strutting like a mighty bull unafraid of all challengers and he changed the world to make it how he wanted.
His life was no longer a genre it was real. His life was a horrifying, romantic, tragic, comical, science-fiction cowboy detective novel, with just a splash or pornography. He was everything a story ought to be.
The problem with a successful story though. There will always be imitators.


Hyper Reality Presents
A T.H.E.M. Acknowledged event
Louis Niccals stars in;
Tsuchigumo
He no longer has to worry about being the baddest motherfucker in the world. The position is taken. - Snow Crash
--- Sophie Thomson
There’s a bullet on the ground and the sound of wheels across the sand. Gulls scream overhead and the waves hiss gently as The Hand of Jack makes his way toward
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Literature
Ser Seregal (COM)
The village was a writhing mass of darkness. When the demon had struck the town was not prepared, they were not ready and so all but the fastest runners and the surest of swords had fallen. The villagers pooled their wealth, made estimates on what was left in the village and then sent messages to the four corners for aid.
First came the mad and desperate, adventurers in ruined old leathers and so sure of their fated greatness. They fell like a house of cards in a tornado. Then came those who knew what they were doing, vetrans of a hundred dives into the dungeons dark. Heroes of places spoken of in legend. As one they admitted that they could not be paid enough to walk into that hellish place.
Hope seemed lost when the church simply advised they “Would pray for them”. The villagers watched as the darkness crawled and consumed their homes. Then he came.
He came with the dawn a mountain of a man decked out in armour that gleamed no matter the light. Villagers spoke in hushed w
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Literature
Tsuchigumo - His Brother's Protector
Once upon a time there was a story that walked like a man, talked like a man and acted like a total bastard. This story walked the world, strutting like a mighty bull unafraid of all challengers and he changed the world to make it how he wanted.
His life was no longer a genre it was real. His life was a horrifying, romantic, tragic, comical, science-fiction cowboy detective novel, with just a splash or pornography. He was everything a story ought to be.
The problem with a successful story though. There will always be imitators.
Hyper Reality Presents
A T.H.E.M. Acknowledged event
Louis Niccals stars in;
Tsuchigumo
Aren't you just doing this because you want a little spice in your boring lives?” The Killer, Persona 4
---Sophie Thomson
Sophie tells herself it’s a fluke the first shot missed. When the second shot also misses she realizes that this won’t be as simple as shooting a regular blind person.
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Literature
Of Suits and Snakes (COM)
The jets of the jacuzzi let out a purr as Felicity sank into the tub. She let her arms braced over the sides as she just let herself go and relax. She deserved this, she’d earned this. Weeks of boring articles, subpar eateries and that whole clone debacle.
She’d earned a little five star pampering at the Montclam. If you were of the wealthy hotel hopping elite, The Montclam was the pearl of London. Top to bottom fixings and furnishings. A staff lovingly told to lick the boot and scrape the heel as much as possible.
This led to a lot of lovely food and a hotel suite twice the size of her own flat. Felicity was in heaven. She tugged on the strings of her Naheka-Brand Union Jack bikini. The weather never really allowed her to wear it, England has perhaps a DAY of sun every seven years. Besides there was another reason to wear it.
The door to the bathroom opened, that’s right private jacuzzi’s in the bathroom what a luxury. In walked one Kana Naheka in her own strik
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Literature
Valeska and Felicity Villains for Hire
“I don’t know, I kind of feel like that’s contractual entrapment.” Valeska looked over the contract she’d been handed. “Like are these timed enhancements or are they permanent?” Valeska looked at the snarled slab of a person in front of her.
His face was hanging off in some places and pretty much just ragged flaps in others. Half of his mouth erupted out of one corner of his face in an explosion of teeth and bloody gums. He was in a perpetual slump thanks to one half of his body stretching to an impossible height, most notably his bizarre bladed arm. A single eye blinked at Valeska from his bicep and she had to do her best not to look nauseous.
“Zhay are nawt tempo-rary.” He managed to say around his ruined fangs. “Zhese emprovements will ehnable yew to be a more pohwaful force of destruction.” Dr Mutanstein said pointing to Valeska. “Awl my creachures have to be enhanced.” He said drumming his
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Literature
It's Tradition
April 1st was special. It was Louis Niccals’ birthday and he liked to spoil himself. He’d rented out The Second Best Sin, a lovely new place he’d been hearing raved about. Rented it out for the Niccals party. All expenses paid at the end of the day.
“Table for the Niccals party,” Louis spoke to the head of the house, “booked it a while ago.” He flashed the girl a grin. She looked at him and then looked at her records book, scanning for his surname.
“A late arrival?” She asked him. His face scrunched up some. “The party has already been here for a while.”
“Without the birthday boy?” Louis asked, his frown quickly scattered away. “Oh it’s a surprise thing! Oh you silly bint you’ve ruined it all.” He snapped at the girl behind the counter. “I’m going to have to pretend to be shocked now.”
Wouldn’t be hard he didn’t expect anyone to come to his birthday after
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Literature
Tsuchigumo- Let's go out tonight
Once upon a time there was a story that walked like a man, talked like a man and acted like a total bastard. This story walked the world, strutting like a mighty bull unafraid of all challengers and he changed the world to make it how he wanted.
His life was no longer a genre it was real. His life was a horrifying, romantic, tragic, comical, science-fiction cowboy detective novel, with just a splash or pornography. He was everything a story ought to be.
The problem with a successful story though. There will always be imitators.
Hyper Reality Presents
A T.H.E.M. Acknowledged event
Louis Niccals stars in;

Tsuchigumo
“Just the bitch of living.As someone you can't stand.”-Spring Awakening, all male chorus
---Sophie Thomson
“I know why you’re here.” The young man on the bicycle tells his passenger. Sophie sits on the back of the bicycle, a parcel under one arm and the other arm holding her steady on the b
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Literature
The Comittee 2- It's Donna Be Fun
Nancy flicked through the sheet letters of recommendations and pursed her lips. “Hmm, you think a streak counts?” She asked Felicity who was flicking through a book. She paused, shrugged her shoulders and peered over the top.
“A streak?” She asked Nancy, dog earing the page she was on. “Like what do you mean a streak?” She put the book to one side and Nancy’s upper half shot across the room on an undulating torso. She was holding a set of photographs.
“Member farming.” She said and handed them to Felicity. “Check her out,” she said handing over one photograph. Felicity had to whistle. Some bombshell wrapped in purple, nice classic mask.
Felicity nodded. “She’s bloody gorgeous,” she said frankly, “I gotta know who her suit designer is. So I can hold them ransom for my own work.” She looked up and noticed the look Nancy was giving her. Judgement passed but Nancy said nothing. “Oh please
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Literature
Tsuchigumo- The Weapon checks in
Once upon a time there was a story that walked like a man, talked like a man and acted like a total bastard. This story walked the world, strutting like a mighty bull unafraid of all challengers and he changed the world to make it how he wanted.
His life was no longer a genre it was real. His life was a horrifying, romantic, tragic, comical, science-fiction cowboy detective novel, with just a splash or pornography. He was everything a story ought to be.
The problem with a successful story though. There will always be imitators.


Hyper Reality Presents
A T.H.E.M. Acknowledged event
Louis Niccals stars in;
Tsuchigumo
“Think of Batman as a great role, like a Hamlet, or Willie Loman … or even James Bond. And play it to suit your strengths.”-Alfred Pennyworth
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Sophie Thomson
“It’s an appealing thought but I hope you’re not entertaining it too seriousl
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Literature
The House of Fun
“Hey, guy, you’re sitting on my car.” John said to the first man he felt he could call pretty, he was a feminine looking sort who was painting his nails as John walked over. The guy looked up at him, a thick black turtleneck on to combat the chill. John adjusted his work backpack, weighed down by books and schematics of the day. “Come on man, don’t be an ass.”
“Yeah you’re the guy.” The man said and waved his hand a few times. From the cars around John’s several people got out and began cracking various joints and limbs. John had seen this movie, he was about to die.
A large man, possibly the largest man in the world put his hand on John’s shoulder, most of his neck and about a third of his arm. “Get in the car.” The large man said pointing to a van. John nodded slowly and walked to the van. When a man can fit your entire head in the palm of his hand you do what he says. That’s just smart.
“Oh hey
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Tsuchigumo- His Brother's Keeper :iconmr-undisclosed:Mr-Undisclosed 4 5
Literature
The Green Machine
John was not surprised to see that Rose owned one of those little micro-compact mini cars you hear that all the environmental freaks owned, he was shocked to see it covered in solar panels. Rose leaned out the window and waved at John.
“John! Come on, I’d use the horn but that will drain the solar battery!” She hadn’t stopped but she had begun to slow down as he approached the car. “Just jump in! Starting the car up takes up the majority of my power and a full day charging in the parking lot is required to make sure it’s ready.”
John grumbled as he opened the door, following the car at a light jog before hurling himself into the car with a loud grunt. He pulled the door shut. “Thanks for stopping to get me, without you know...stopping.”
“No problem science buddy.” Rose said a cup of coffee grasped in one of her many tendrils. She sipped at it. “Ahhh, you’d think knowing the owners of CONA we’d get a dis
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Literature
The Mighty Misunderstanding
It was with much horror that Ellinore Hill cowered behind the towering figure of Canpaza Orenda, who paused to allow the slender reporter to use him as cover.
“What is it?” Puzzleface asked. “Ex-Boyfriend?” She snickered at the sign of the cowering reporter, who only hissed at the woman in return, swiping at her before dragging her behind Canpaza, who it should be said is not a wide man but stood perfectly still as two women hid behind him. Very very easily seen by everyone looking at them.
“No.” Elly responded, leaning around Canpaza to double check her thoughts. She felt exposed, suddenly realizing that hiding behind Canpaza did absolutely nothing. “Quick, shuffle behind that wall.”
“It would be much faster to walk.” Canpaza said simply but started to shuffle as he was asked, until they reached a corner of the building. Elly rolled into cover and stood up. Puzzleface floated beside her.
“The roll was cool,” she g
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The Committee of Elastic Blondes
“With this I call to order the first meeting of the Committee of Elastic Blondes!” A banner unfurled from the ceiling spilling confetti and streamers down onto the table below, a polite clap came from two people.
Nancy was proud to see such a turn out with 100% of members having arrived. That said there was only four members so far. Still she had little doubt they would soon have a club that stretched from border to border, both literally and thanks to the staggering number of individuals who could fit the criteria to join.
“Point of order.” Felicity DeLuca official treasurer and third member of the club piped up. “One of the members is neither of those things.” She indicated the punk rocker sat in one corner of the room, headphones on and reading a fashion magazine. “Why is he an officially sworn in member?”
“I think,” Rachel Blackheart the vice president and second official member spoke up, “because he technically coul
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The Arms Race
“It’s not bad. Skin job is phenomenal, the lack of hair is a suspension killer though.”
John turned away from his current project, a little hover pad that he hoped to try and get approved for a fullsize build for FLYING CARS. John was promised flying cars in the future and it looked like he’d just have to be the one to make them at this rate. He locked eyes with someone who...well someone who was probably looking for Rose.
He wasn’t tall but he was exceptionally pale and...shockingly ripped. The guy had on a lab coat but no shirt underneath it, just a bare exposed chest and muscles. All of it that same milky hue. Hair, he had lots on his head. Just a rats nest of brown hair that trailed around to his waist. The smile though, the smile had Rose written all over it. Big thick shark like fangs filled his mouth to bursting.
“What?” John said after realizing he’d been staring for a while now. Not that the man seemed to mind, his eyes were fixe
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I really want to like this image and I do- I honestly do- but there's just so many little lazy things that get in the way of it having ...


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A writer-man who has a bad habit of mixing his fact and his fictions. Let's his ideas get ahead of him but still attempts to make work consistent and enjoyable. I mostly write Super-Heroes, Government Conspiracies and FactXFiction is my OTP forever.

FAQ-

What's under the bandages?
Skin.

Are you open for Trades?
YES, always. I just don't accept them all.

Are you open for Commissions?
Yes, I've yet to refuse one.

Do you do requests?
Not always but I usually have UNIQUE journals that let people get free stories.

Where do I start on your stories? There's quite a lot.
Yes there are, thanks. All of my FOLDERS IN the gallery are organized in linear order so just open any of them and start with the first one. Start with Year of Theft or Year of Fire- or just read the shorts. My stories are like comics, pick one up and you can start there.

Can I ask you to critique my cast/writing? I've heard you do that.
ABSOLUTELY I will do that for you. I am not gentle, but am only one man with one opinion. But I'm always happy to help.

Do you skype/discord/teamspeak?
I do. But you gotta level up our relationship to level 5 to get that stuff.

Do you have CHARACTER BIOS!?
I do click the website link to go to the LIVE BIO BIBLE, which I update when able. You can EVEN highlight stuff to ask questions, wouldn't that be fun?
Interests
You people know the rule- I upload a story and I get to upload a journal. We're here for art not my opinions on fresh-fish. By the by get into eel smuggling it's a billion dollar industry for Elver's especially, you didn't hear it from me. 

-The Work; Read about character cameos

Obviously the next big piece is Tsuchigumo - Redd part 3; His Brother, His Treasure in which Harry Redd explains his feelings toward his baby brother and what he means to him. While beating the living snot out of several people and ruining the highway for several people. Also Sophie- Did I killer her again? She got her ear blown most of the way off, shot in the arm and in the heart!? God I'm not kind am I? Anyway the next part of the Redd cycle will feature a LOT of cameo characters. I asked if anyone wanted to submit a hero or villain for the Redd and or Felicity stories but never got any reply. SO I'll assume nobody wants in any more?

If you do I guess post a comment. 


But before we get there I've a small laundry list of stories to get through. You know me. Shorts between the big stuff, keeps me from getting bored. So far the upcoming stories are a sequel to Felicity and Valeska Villains for hire.  The New Recruits by DracoDragite :icondracodragite: did a nice picture hinting at the sequel. :iconcomical-weapon: 's Valeska and my Felicity get sent on a mission with Cindy as backup. Will it all work out or will they all die horribly? Who knows. I assume things will be destroyed regardless.

The long rumoured RETURN of Dyna-Girl and Gas-Money. I dunno why but these guys seem to want to drag their feet when it comes to my writing them. Still chip away at the coal face and something should emerge.

Lastly we've got a story based on this work  COMM - Just A Really Big Panini by Atrox-C In which Felicity finds herself trapped in a dimension of cartoon critters...and so makes the most of it to try and grab a bite to eat.

Very Felicity centric aren't we? I'll have to get away from her next time we get to the shorts. Maybe check in on Grant or Hiro or that J.P. guy. It's been a while since any of them did anything hasn't it? Lazy buggers.

Commissions And Trades

Hey these are now open all the time- cause jobs and me are going through a rough period. 

When it comes to Art-Trades I work on the basics of I give as good as I get. If you ask for something I'll do it to the best I can and I expect that in return. I've written 20 page stories and gotten full colour drawings of characters in return and that's fine with me. If you want to do a trade or work on something approach me- I won't know what you want unless ya tell me homie.

As for Commissions-

My rates have not changed. It's $5 per 500 words but you don't pay the inbetweens. I.e. 1590 words =$15 and 2450 words = $20

For my services you get a full draft, total viewing privileges AS I WRITE IT so you can critique it each step of the way, a full re-edit once a draft is complete and a personal copy of your own of course. Some of my commissioned work can be seen here  and script writing commissions- which I can't show you as they are IN production projects...but I do those too for $3 per page. Hit me up.

For an idea of rates ;

Ser Seregal (COM)The village was a writhing mass of darkness. When the demon had struck the town was not prepared, they were not ready and so all but the fastest runners and the surest of swords had fallen. The villagers pooled their wealth, made estimates on what was left in the village and then sent messages to the four corners for aid.
First came the mad and desperate, adventurers in ruined old leathers and so sure of their fated greatness. They fell like a house of cards in a tornado. Then came those who knew what they were doing, vetrans of a hundred dives into the dungeons dark. Heroes of places spoken of in legend. As one they admitted that they could not be paid enough to walk into that hellish place.
Hope seemed lost when the church simply advised they “Would pray for them”. The villagers watched as the darkness crawled and consumed their homes. Then he came.
He came with the dawn a mountain of a man decked out in armour that gleamed no matter the light. Villagers spoke in hushed w
 Ser Seregal my newest commission at 2981 words cost $25 
Of Suits and Snakes (COM)The jets of the jacuzzi let out a purr as Felicity sank into the tub. She let her arms braced over the sides as she just let herself go and relax. She deserved this, she’d earned this. Weeks of boring articles, subpar eateries and that whole clone debacle.
She’d earned a little five star pampering at the Montclam. If you were of the wealthy hotel hopping elite, The Montclam was the pearl of London. Top to bottom fixings and furnishings. A staff lovingly told to lick the boot and scrape the heel as much as possible.
This led to a lot of lovely food and a hotel suite twice the size of her own flat. Felicity was in heaven. She tugged on the strings of her Naheka-Brand Union Jack bikini. The weather never really allowed her to wear it, England has perhaps a DAY of sun every seven years. Besides there was another reason to wear it.
The door to the bathroom opened, that’s right private jacuzzi’s in the bathroom what a luxury. In walked one Kana Naheka in her own strik
 Cost $80 for 8291 words. 

I do long and I do short. So don't hesitate to hit me up- I even knock off some cash if I REALLY enjoy the project.

SLOTS
1- SCRIPT COMMISSION COMPLETE
2- Long Form Writing IN NEGOTIATION
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  • Reading: The Wild Storm

Best entrance to a secret lair 

38%
10 deviants said A number of security doors each more ludicrous than the last
27%
7 deviants said A pair of poles hidden behind a bookcase and activated by moving a bust of William Shakespeare
19%
5 deviants said A big happy slide
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4 deviants said A teleporter hidden in something very embaressing

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Someboy101 Featured By Owner 1 day ago
Hey there. How are you?
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Crisis-Comics Featured By Owner May 31, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ah- somebody ELSE who mixes superheroes and government conspiracies! I am pleased to make your acquaintance.
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thegreyzen Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2017  Student Digital Artist
thanks a lot for the fav! :D (Big Grin)
Favu Favu2 by thegreyzen 
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NightmareChameleon Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2017  Student General Artist
Also, try doing some sci-fi horror but from the monster's perspective.
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NightmareChameleon Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2017  Student General Artist
This is some amazing work. +1 lama to you
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